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Why You Need To Listen Today:
If you're getting ready for the CELPIP exam, you need to be working on Speaking, Listening, Reading and Writing skills. In other words, you must focus on each skill without leaving one out!
Today, I want to help you focus on unleashing the power of description to help you improve your writing (and speaking) scores on the CELPIP exam.
I Share Two Stories:
1. The Story of the JuJubes that Tasted Like...Poo!
2. The moisturizing hand soap that made my wife's hands bleed.
Here are some ways to unlock the power of details!
- Don’t just state what’s wrong. Add adjectives and other sensory details.
- Don’t just say the situation you’re experiencing is disappointing, let the reader know what you were expecting, and then what you got instead.
- If you’re describing an image, like you’ll need to do on the CELPIP exam, don’t just say you see a woman walking with her dog in the park. Give the listener details!
Why Details Matter:
Details help your writing and speaking become more interesting to the reader/listener.
Details help you express your ideas in more influential ways.
Details will help you get a higher score on the CELPIP exam - so make sure you’re using them.
For every topic sentence - the sentence that conveys the most important idea of the paragraph, you should have two or three sentences that include details that back up or reinforce the topic sentence.
Listen through the two stories again. Can you pick out some of the detail words I shared with you?
How did it help you understand our problem or what was wrong with the products? (Did it help or make it more difficult?)
Make sure you always use the power of details to strengthen your writing and speaking - both in real life and when you write the CELPIP exam.
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Transcripts
Hello and welcome to the Speak English Fearlessly Podcast. This is the podcast for motivated English learners who want to speak English fearlessly and learn practical tips and strategies to conquer the CELPIP exam. I also love to feature encouraging interviews with regular people - people just like you, who are working towards becoming fluent in English so we can learn from their experiences.
Who am I, my name is Aaron Nelson. I’ve been an English teacher for over 16 years, and I now work to help students prepare for the CELPIP exam through online classes.
You know something, if you’re preparing to take the CELPIP exam, it’s easy to over focus on areas that you’re already comfortable with vs where you need to be working to improve. One of those ‘easy to overlook’ skill sets is writing. People usually pay more attention to speaking and listening skills, and tend to ignore writing skills. Today you and I are going to fix that by taking a quick, and hopefully fun, look at how you can unlock the power of description to increase your CELPIP score.
Why You Need To Listen Today:
If you're getting ready for the CELPIP exam, you need to be working on Speaking, Listening, Reading and Writing skills.
Today, I want to help you focus on unleashing the power of description to help you improve your writing (and speaking) scores on the CELPIP exam.
First, a story. (Or two.)
I come from a family of jubejube lovers. Have you ever tried them? These candies take me to my happy place - they're soft, chewy and delicious. I got my love for them from my Dad - he is a raving jube jube lover.
One of the best jube jube stories that I can remember is the time when my Dad proudly brought home a giant bag of jujubes. It was the largest bag of deliciousness that I had ever seen - because up to that point, the only jujube bags we had had were small ones.
We were so excited to try them out!
We gathered around the kitchen table and watched as my Dad excitedly pulled the bag open. He lifted the bag up and took a deep smell, expecting to get a nose full of sweet goodness.
But something was wrong. Terribly wrong.
Instead of smiling, my Dad frowned.
“That doesn’t smell right.” He said. And passed the bag over to my brother and I so we could inspect it.
We stuffed our noses in, and immediately pulled them back - it smelled terrible, like something had gone bad.
My brother, pardon me for saying so, blurted out: It smelled like someone farted in the bag and then sealed it in.
I remember laughing at the funny image his words created in my mind, but at the same time, I found myself totally agreeing with him.
My Father did as well.
It smelled terrible.
Then we decided to taste it.
First my Dad. Then my brother. Then me.
All of us had the same experience: we popped the jujube into our mouth expecting the usual chewy sweet tastiness, but instead we were met with something bitter.
Not only did it smell like a fart….we all agreed that it tasted like one! (At least what we imagined tasting a fart would be like.)
Disappointed, my brother and I handed the bag back to my Father. My brother and I went to do something else, but my Dad did something different. He sat down at his desk, pulled out some paper, and began to write a letter of complaint to the jujube company.
(This was pre-internet. Pre e-mail.) Pen. Paper. An envelope and a stamp.
He showed us his letter before he mailed it off.
I distinctly remember him writing that he was a long term client and their number one jujube fan.
He explained that this was the largest jujube purchase he had ever made, and that he was terribly excited to try them out.
But instead of the jujube company’s regular high quality sweet offerings, something terrible had happened, because when we opened the bag, we smelled something that reminded us of…well, poo.
To our dismay, when we tried to eat the product, we discovered that the taste was not that far off from poo either.
He respectfully asked if they could please send a refund. He put the big bag of smelly nasty tasting jujubes in a box, and put the letter inside it, and then sent it to the jujube manufacturing company.
I remember wondering what good a letter to a big company would do, but withing a few weeks, we got a huge box in the mail. It was from the jujube company, and was easily double the size of the one my Dad sent off.
My Dad opened the box, and much to our amazement, we found ourselves looking at a box filled with every product that the jujube company made! Including a brand new giant bag of jujubes!
There was also a letter from the company. They thanked us for being such loyal jujube customers, and apologized for the jujubes that smelled and tasted like poo.
Amazing! And this time around, everything tasted exactly like it should have!
We were so excited about what happened.
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This past week, we ran out of hand soap. So I went to the nearby grocery store and looked for a refill of the liquid soap. I found one that said, “Softhands! Moistens and disinfects.” I bought it thinking it would be what we needed.
The very next day my wife showed me her hands. After just a few uses of the new soap, my wife’s hands were dry, cracking and even starting to bleed a little.
I took it back.
When I got to the service counter, the lady asked me why I was returning the product.
I could have just said, “Because the soap is hurting our hands.” That likely would have been enough.
But instead, I decided to add some more details. So I explained that I was looking for a soap that was antibacterial, but that would also be soft on our hands. This soap promised it would do both, but unfortunately, it didn’t. With only a few uses, the soap had caused my wife’s hands to dry out, crack and even begin to bleed.
The lady was instantly on my side, and was actually shocked for me and my wife. “Oh no!” she said. “That’s terrible! Of course you can get your money back.”
She took the soap and immediately refunded my money.
Details. They help you get your point across to your audience. They also will help you increase your score on the CELPIP exam if you use them.
Using details will also help you never run out of things to say before you finish the writing or speaking task, so it’s important for you to develop your ability to use them.
Here are some ways to unlock the power of details!
Don’t just state what’s wrong. Add adjectives and other sensory details to help your audience feel, see, smell, taste what you’re experiencing.
Don’t just say the situation you’re experiencing is disappointing, let the reader know what you were expecting, and then what you got instead.
If you’re describing an image, like you’ll need to do on the CELPIP exam, don’t just say you see a woman walking with her dog in the park. Give the listener details! You can talk about the woman’s age: is she a teenager? Is she a young adult? Is she in her mid-fourties? What about how she looks? Is she happy? Sad? Serious? Worried? What about her clothes? You should talk about colors and the kinds of clothes you see. The point: talk about the details. Bring out as many as you can.
Details help your writing and speaking become more interesting to the reader/listener.
Details help you express your ideas in more influential ways.
Details will help you get a higher score on the CELPIP exam - so make sure you’re using them.
For every topic sentence - the sentence that conveys the most important idea of the paragraph, you should have two or three sentences that include details that back up or reinforce the topic sentence.
Listen through the two stories again. Can you pick out some of the detail words I shared with you?
How did it help you understand our problem or what was wrong with the products? (Did it help or make it more difficult?)
Make sure you always use the power of details to strengthen your writing and speaking - both in real life and when you write the CELPIP exam.
Thank you for listening to this week’s podcast.
